Poor Imp

A different telling of The Firebird - much more lighthearted than the Russian. ^_~ But wonderfully amusing, neatly rhymed. With him was the King to wed So Ivan’s heart wouldn’t ...

You've got admirable thoughts, Anti, and I think it's inherently human - whatever the circumanstances - to look for hope in the future. But as an essay? It's not organised, ...

Hey Trident...I've finally gotten to seeing this. I knew you'd said you were going to try to enter the FDWC - a bit uncertain as to the if or where. ...

Oh...too pointed, as in true. I had to read it aloud to hear and think over the rhythm - and I think it came out more than apt. I would ...

Conversational prose is always apt for getting close and quickly to a character's thoughts and voice. For the most part, you've got it - Alex sounds like what he...is. ^_~ ...

I enjoyed it, Snoink. Of the rhyme, no complaints...except for the very last line -- And the last thing I saw of him Was his tail holding high. ...his tail ...

Ah, Fand...that was done so well. I don't tend towards anything even vaguely romantic - too many read that were inept. ^_^'' But this was engaging throughout, strong voice flowing ...

You're a deft hand at rants, TBR. ^_^ ...and I think you've got most of the aspects of a good poem as well, if rather scattered in the heat of ...

Hullo Smaur. I just wanted to say how vivid this was - and remark on for something as it was for the challenge. ^_^ I enjoyed it all around. It ...

Neat short - a sketch, Fand? The place almost became the main character so prominent was it, and so well described. ^_^ But it wouldn't have been much without character ...

Oh I don't know, Jig - seemed decent enough... ^_~ No, in all honesty, why shouldn't it have been marked highly? I loved the descriptions, deft contrasts and the picture ...

That was eerie...grotesquely woven; and you pulled off the character deftly. Half-mad and the morbid fantasies... The random choice struck particularly - deranged and believable. You switch tense thou

You see, its quite obvious that its a female book, a female classic, but did my idiot teacher care about that? NO! Who in their right mind, apart from those ...

( chapter 2 crit continued ) “You lost rank?” the young officer said, now really interested. Shan threw a look at him, irritated in this pounding, pounding, POUNDING heat... The ...

Hilarious dim irony! Dim in no sense of the word stupid. ^_^ The brief paragraphs and the continued sustained tone of dour gravity made it all the more amusing and ...